How to Write Your Characters’ Actions with Clarity

How to Write Your Characters' Actions with ClarityHave you ever tried to watch an old film? Not a digitally remastered edition or a corrected copy, but a genuinely old film, silent and sepia-toned. Some frames are misplaced or backwards. Some aren’t there at all.

You can follow the action well enough, filling in the gaps where they appear-but that doesn’t mean you don’t see the gaps. Maybe the story is interesting, and maybe the cinematography is compelling, but the experience is jerky and abrupt. That’s fine if you’re watching out of historic curiosity, but not so much if you’re trying to engage with the story.

If you’re writing a novel or memoir, this is exactly the reading experience you risk when the action you write is inexact or incomplete.

What Is Action in Fiction?

When I talk about action, I don’t just mean fast car chases or massive explosions. I mean any and all action, like the simple act of walking into the kitchen to boil a cup of tea. A story is based upon action big and small, and your readers’ investment in your story has a lot to do with their ability to imagine the action you describe.

But writing action-action that isn’t jerky and inconsistent like an old film, but rather clear and effective-is not as easy as it sounds. In fact, it’s one of the greatest challenges faced by authors. As a book editor I see such struggles frequently, and they take on a few different forms.

How to Use Context to Create Clear Actions

Suppose I told you I walked to my computer so I could write this blog article. Simple enough, right? Readers know what walking is. Readers know what a computer is. This act is not difficult to imagine.

But consider this: Where is the computer?

Some people keep their computer in the living room or the kitchen. Some may write at an office or in a coffeehouse. My computer happens to be in my bedroom, and if that’s what I imagined when I wrote that first sentence, then I failed to convey that to my readers. I didn’t provide the necessary context.

Context is the information readers need at any moment to understand your writing in the way you intend. In this instance, our concern is context in the form of setting. Because I didn’t establish the physical location of my computer, readers were left without the information needed to understand the action I described.

But I didn’t just fail to mention where exactly I was walking to. I also didn’t mention where I was walking from. And without basic and necessary details like where I’m starting from and where I’m going, even the very basic action of walking becomes confusing and impossible fully to understand.

In the context of film, imagine frames so faded over time you can no longer see the background. When the picture is incomplete, much of the meaning is inevitably lost.

The depiction of action requires the same details readers would need were they navigating the real world. My computer is in my bedroom. I’m walking to my bedroom from the living room. To reach my bedroom from the living room requires traversing a hallway past the laundry room and the kitchen. When I enter my bedroom, my computer is against the near wall directly to my left. With each new bit of context the action becomes clearer.

How Incomplete Actions Pull Readers From Your Story

Where a lot of authors really struggle is skipping not only the context, but the action itself.

Suppose I’ve walked from the living room to my computer in the bedroom to write this blog. I hear a knock at the front door. Then I open the door and find a package by my feet.

Again, none of the action here is all that complicated. Yet once again, I’ve omitted something: not so much context and setting, but rather the action that enables me to open the front door. I never get up from my computer. I never leave my bedroom. I never walk to the front door. I’m just suddenly there.

Readers are smart. They can infer the action that must have happened in between. But it’s just like the old film: yes, the viewers can and will fill in the gaps, but the effort means they’re never really absorbed in the action. A story with incomplete and missing action-a story that includes missing frames-is a jarring, awkward experience.

How to Craft Clear Transitions and Scene Changes

So you’re watching that old film, and you’ve come upon a sequence that’s actually pretty well-preserved. The frames are complete. The action is clear and easy to follow. And more than that: it’s really, really good.

Then, without warning, you find yourself in the middle of the action-packed climax. What the heck happened? How did you get here? No matter how absorbed you were in the film a moment ago-in fact, especially if you were deeply absorbed a moment ago-you’ve just been thrown right out of your suspension of disbelief.

For an old film, this may be the result of a missing reel. In a novel or memoir, it has more to do with writing like this:

I sat back down at my computer and carried on writing my blog post.

I honked my horn at the car in front of me. Come on! Move it!

Now, obviously, my computer is not in my car and I’m not writing my blog post while driving. (Never blog and drive, kids.) After a moment of confusion, readers will realize the intent here is a change of scene.

But that doesn’t make the transition any less abrupt.

So what do we do? We have a few options. We can write or summarize the action in between these two scenes. For example, I can explain that, as soon as I sit down at my computer, I realize I need to pick up a prescription from the pharmacy. I get into my car and get stuck in traffic. So now I’m in my car, honking the horn.

Alternately, if writing or summarizing the action in between is tedious-if it doesn’t serve the story-I can instead write a transition. A transition can be pretty simple. It might look like this:

A half hour later, I sat in the driver’s seat honking at the car in front of me.

By adding a half hour later and slightly tweaking the sentence, I convey to readers this is a new scene. Because I take the time to do so, the shift from one scene to the next is less abrupt.

Finally, I can utilize a section break-that is, a gap between the sentences, often marked by punctuation (typically, asterisks). Used in moderation, this is a clear designation indicating the end of one scene and the start of another.

3 Rules of Thumb for Clear Action

What can you do to make sure you’re writing effective action? Here are some ideas to keep in mind.

1. Your role as a writer is to guide readers from one moment to the next. Always consider not only where you want them to be, but also how they get there.

2. Setting is fundamental to action. Be sure to define your setting, especially when it changes. Remember: you may see setting and action clearly, but readers can’t if you don’t show them.

3. Whenever there’s a change in place and/or time, it’s critical we see either action, a transition, or a section break.

Don’t forget that even the best, most impressive story in the world will fall short if the frames are missing or the film is incomplete. Be clear in your action and watch your story come to life.

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Wordplayers, tell me your opinion! How have you clearly indicated your character’s actions in your current scene? Tell us in the comments!

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